作文中考英语写作技巧静安初中培训机构 15页

初三作文讲义系列新王牌作文中考英语写作技巧静安初中培训机构新王牌角色大反转——我当老师评作文作文点评体验：我评我优秀！找回更加优秀的自己！BYZhangChenWhat’syourviewonsettingofffirecrackersIt’satraditionactivityfor the ChinesetosetofffirecrackersonNew Year’seve.EverytimeIamexcitinged toseethebeautifulfirecrackers. Soas thelasttime. [Icouldn’tconcealmyexcitementatthesightofthebeautifulfirecrackers.] However,moreandmorepeople are againstsettingofffirecrackersbecauseoftheseriousairpollution.Itcausesmanyhealthproblemandpeoplehavetowearbreathingmaskwhentheygoout.Iagreewiththem.Althoughfirecrackersarecharming, [Comparedwiththecharmingfirecrackers,] theenvironmentismoreimportanttous.Ihopethegovernmentmustmakesomerulesaboutsettingofffirecrackers assoonaspossible.Wemayalsofindwaystocreateenvironmentally friendly firecrackers.文章条理比较清晰，结尾的提议很好。部分句子表达有误，要作修改。ByZhangAoWhat’sYourViewonSettingoffFirecrackersSettingofffirecrackers—oneofthemostfamousChinesetraditionalcustoms,alwaysbringsmelotsof marvelous memorieswhentheSpringFestivaliscoming. AsfarasIamconcerned, althoughitisnoisytosetofffirecrackers,thesoundstillmakesmehappyandexcited. [Despitethenoise,thesoundofthefirecrakersgivesusagreatdealofexcitementandhappiness.] Butinmyopinion,nowadays,setting offfirecrackers isharmfulto theenvironmentasitwill release plentyofcarbon15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌dioxideandothergaswhich doharmto theatmosphereandmaketheairpollutionmoreandmoreserious. [worsentheairpollution.] Ihopewecanfinda‘green’way to celebratetheSpringFestivalbecausewehaveonlyoneearth.(103words)内容很详细，既有自己认同的方面，也提出了存在的问题，最后给出的建议也与环保话题息息相关。句式丰富，但还可以作些调整让句子表达更地道。ByWuJiaxinWhat’sYourViewonSettingoffFirecrackersIt’scommonknowledgethat firecrackersare indispensable inSpringFestival,lastyearwas noexception.Inmyopinion,thisChinesecustomcanbringmealotofhappiness.However,thiscustomstillhassomedisadvantages. Firstandforemost, ifwesetofftoomanyfirecrackers,theenvironmentwillbepollutedsothatwecan’tbreathefreshair. Moreover, some peoplearesettingofffirecrackers while others aresleeping.It’s reallymakespeoplenervous. Lastbutnotleast, settingoffthemisexactlydangerous.Everyyearmanypeopleareinjuredbecauseofthe firecrackers. Inbrief, althoughkeepingthecustomisnecessary,settingoff firecrackersproperlyisnecessaryaswell. [isinbadlyneedaswell.](109words)结构、内容各方面都写得很好。先用普遍情况引出话题再从三方面论述劣势。三个分论点着墨差不多，其实可以将最重要的内容放在第一条，最不重要的一笔带过，有详有略会更有层次感。 ByGaoTingyan15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌Thoughfirecrackersfraybriefly,theystillplayanimportant roll role inourlifebecausesettingofffirecrackersisoneoftheChinesetraditionalcustoms. With Dueto theairpollution,settingofffirecrackersseemstobeimproperly.Whenpeoplesetting offthem,theyreleasesomethingbad. (描述不清楚somethingbad指什么？) Moreandmorepeoplerealizethisproblemandbeginsettingofffirecrackers asfewastheycould.Iamsureit'sagoodbeginning.Ifyoureallylovethem,youcancallsomeonelikeyouandsettingoffthemtogether. (这句和前文并无太大联系。且人称代词容易造成误解) Theyprobablyreleaselesscarbondioxideandwillbegoodfortheworld. [Thelesscarbondioxidefirecrakersrelease,themoregoodtheywilldototheworld.] Let'sdoittogether (dowhat? 出现指示代词前文一定要找得到所指代的内容) andrebuildawonderfulplacewhichwelivein.(110words)一上来首句就用让步状语从句的写法不推荐。可以先说放爆竹是春节传统之一，再过渡到燃放烟花爆竹的不利影响更符合思维习惯。body部分的句子一定要有所联系。另外指示代词的使用还要再考虑下。ByZhaoYitianWhat’sYourViewonSettingoffFirecrackers? Everyyear,millionsofpeoplesettingofffirecrackersmakesairpollutiongetmoreandmoreserious. (Chinglish)Althoughsetting offfirecrackersisa traditional way to celebrate thenewyear,Ineverthinkitisagoodidea.Ononehand,hugeamountsofrubbishwhichismadebysettingfirecrackerscan’tbecleaned immdiately.Ontheotherhand,thegasesfromthefirecrackerspollutetheairanddoharmtoourbody.Inaword, thelessfirecrackersweset off, thelessairpollutionwillbecaused.Itistimeforustoprotecttheearthbysettinglessfirecrackers. (93words)15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌除去部分语法错误，内容、结构都符合中考标准，是能拿到较高的分数。但要注意第二段关联词的选用。ononehand…ontheotherhand表示相反的两方面。如果同是指出缺点，应使用表示并列的关联词foronething,…foranother… 要想在文采分上有突破，还要多花心思在丰富句式上。ByJiangXueniMyviewonsettingoff firecrackers    February10th is the Spring Festival.It'sagreatdayforallthepeoplethroughouttheworld. (Areyousure“throughouttheworld”?TheSpringFestivalhasnothingtodowithwesterncountries…) Asthesayinggoes,"Agoodbeginningishalfthebattle".Somanypeoplegoouttocelebratebysetting offfirecrackers. (谚语与放爆竹没有必然联系……) It'sakindofChinesetraditionalcustom. (切入话题太冗长，请精简！保留最后两句话即可！) However,inmyopinion,itwillpollutetheairandmakeabignoise aswell.LastspringfestivalIdidn'tsetoffit.Ithinkit'sdangerousanditcanalsomakemefeelfrightened. [Iamlikelytogetintoapanicifthefirecrackersbreakoutinasecond.] Inaddition, ithasaterriblesmellandwillexactlypollutetheenvironment. Tosumup, Idon'tlikesettingofffirecrackersatall.(106words)文章前半部分说了很多有关春节的内容。应试作文要尽量在前两句开门见山直奔主题。观点部分的句子略显单薄，可以就其中一两个方面展开论述。词汇、句型表达亮点不多。为大家提供几个经典的英语句型，只要使用准确、时宜，相信一定会为你的写作加分不少！1.主语+is+the+最高级+名词+(that)+Ihaveeverseen(known/heard/had/read)15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌HelenisthemostbeautifulgirlthatIhaveeverseen.海伦是我所看过最美丽的女孩。Mr.ZhangisthekindestteacherthatIhaveeverhad.张老师是我曾经遇到最仁慈的教师。2.Nothingismoreimportant+than+todosth.没什么比做某事更重要的事。Nothingismoreimportantthantokeepfit.没有比保持健康更重要的事。Nothingismoreimportantthantopotectourenvironment.没有什么比环保更重要的事。Nothingismoreimportantthantogainknowledge.没有什么比学习知识更重要的事。3.Thereisnodenyingthat+S+V(不可否认的……)Thereisnodenyingthatnothingismoreimportantthantoprotectourenvironment.不可否认的，没有什么比环保更重要的事。4.Anadvantageofdoingsth.isthat+句子(做某事的优点是……)Anadvantageoftakingexercisesisthatitcanmakeuskeephealthy.锻炼身体的优点是它可以让我们保持健康。5.Thereasonwhy+句子isthat+句子(……的原因是……)Thereasonwhywehavetogrowtreesisthattheycanprovideuswithfreshair.6.The+比较级+S+V,the+比较级+S+V(愈……愈……)Theharderyouwork,themoreprogressyoumake.你愈努力，你愈进步。15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌Themorebooksweread,themorelearnedwebecome.我们书读愈多，我们愈有学问。7.By+Ving,xxcanxx(通过……，……能够……)Bytakingexercise,wecanalwaysstayhealthy.通过做运动，我们能够始终保持健康。Byreading,wecangetmoreknowladge.通过阅读，我们可以获得更多的知识。8.Thosewhoxxx+V（那些…的人……)Thosewhobreakthelawshouldbepunished.违法的人应该受处罚。9.Thatisthereasonwhyxxx(那就是……的原因)Summerishot.ThatisthereasonwhyIdon'tlikeit.夏天很炎热。那就是我不喜欢它的原因。10.becloselyrelatedtoxxx(与……息息相关)Takingexerciseiscloselyrelatedtohealth.做运动与健康息息相关。11.Getintothehabitof+V.ingWeshouldgetintothehabitofpreviewingandreviewing.我们应该养成预习和复习的习惯。12.Thanksto+N/V.ing,xxx(因为，由于……)&Thanksb.for(doing)sth.因为……感谢某人Thankstohisencouragement,Ifinallyrealizedmydream.　因为他的鼓励，我终于实现我的梦想。15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌Thankyouforhelpingmealot.谢谢你帮了我那么多。13.…haveagreatinfluenceonxx(对……有很大的影响)Smokinghasagreatinfluenceonourhealth。抽烟对我们的健康有很大的影响。14.Inmyopinion,…就我的看法…Inmyopinion,playingcopmutergamesnotonlytakesmuchtimebutalsoisharmfultohealth.　就我的看法玩电脑游戏既花费时间也有害健康。15.Asweallknown众所周知AsweallknownthatHangzhouisabeautifulcity.众所周知杭州是座美丽的城市。16.Onnooccasioncanwe+V(我们绝对不能……)Onnooccasioncanweignorethevalueofknowledge.我们绝对不能忽略知识的价值。17.Itistime+sb+过去式（是……的时候了）Itistimetheauthoritiesconcernedtookproperstepstosolvetheenvironmentproblems.18.Beforced/compelled/obliged+todo(不得不……)Sincetheexaminationisaroundthecorner,Iamcompelledtogiveupdoingsports.19.Itisconceivable/obvious/apparent+that+句子(……是可想而知的，明显的，显然的)15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌20.Sparenoefforttodo（不遗余力的）Weshouldsparenoefforttobeautifyourenvironment.21.bringhometo+sb+sth.使人认识到Weshouldbringhometopeoplethevalueofworkinghard.15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“MyLifeasaJuniorThreeStudent”.（以“我的初三生活”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)Usethefollowingpointsasareference.（以下问题仅供参考）ØWhatisyourlifelikeasajuniorthreestudent?ØDoyouenjoyyourlifenow?Why?Beginning:1.Astimegoesby,Ihavebeenajuniorthreestudentandmylifehasbecomemuchbusierthanbeforebecausethereismuchknowledgetolearn.2.Threeyearsago,Ienteredthemiddleschool,andnowmylifeasajuniorthreestudentbegins.3.Nowadays,Iamajuniorthreestudentandthelifeisalsodifferentfromthelifeinthepast.4.Asajuniorthreestudent,Iambusybutveryfullandcolourful.5.Asweallknow,juniorthreeisveryimportanttous.6.Astimegoesby,Iamajuniorthreestudentnowandmylifehaschangedalot.7.Inmyopinion,everyjuniorthreestudentisbusyandtiredbecausewehavetodomanythings.8.Asisknowntoall,juniorthreeisanessentialprocessthatalmosteveryonehastoexperience.Body:1．Ithinkthelifeofschoolisfulloffunandcolourful.2.AlthoughIamtiredandbusy,IenjoyitverymuchbecauseIlearnhowtosolveproblemsandgetsomeexperience.3.WhenIwasintrouble,Inevergaveupandtriedmybesttoworkthemout.4.Asweallknow,sayinggoes:Nopains,Nogains.5.Becauseofmyhardwork,IgotgoodmarksandI’msureIwillhaveamorebrightschoollifeinthefuture.6.Inmyopinion,thelifeisfulloffun.Wehavekindteachersandfriendlyclassmates.7.Topasstheexam,Ireadmanybooksandstudymuchharder.15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌8.Ilistentomyteachersinclassanddomyhomeworkmuchmorecarefully9.Althoughmystudyisbusy,Istillenjoymylife,becausemylifeisveryrichandhappy.10.IambusystudyingandIhavelessandlesstimetorelaxmyself,becauseIneedtostudyharder,tomakemydreamcometruebystudying.11.IcanmakemyselfmoreconfidentsothatIcandealwithalltheproblemsIwillmeet.12.However,Idon’tfeeltiredbuthappy,Idon’thaveanytimetobesadbecausethelifeiswonderfulandinteresting.13.Istudyhardanddiscusswithmyclassmatesandthismakesmehappy.14.Thisyear,weshouldstudyharderthanbeforeandalmostdon’thavefreetimetodevelopmyinterestsbecausewewillhaveanimportantexaminationinJune.15.Theteachertoldus:Hardworkisessentialforsuccess.16.Ifyouwanttomakeyourdreamcometrue,youmustlearnhowtostudyhardandhowtosavethetime.17.IthinkthejuniorthreelifeisveryhappybecauseIusuallydothingswithmyfriendandwecanmakeeachotherbetterandhappier.18.Iamalwaysasbusyasabee.Ending:1.Atthesametime,Ialsoenjoythetime.2.Asweallknow,friendshipismoreimportantthanwealth.ThisiswhyIlikemylifeasajuniorthreestudent.3.IthinkIwillneverforgetmywonderfulandcolourfullifethisyear.4.IenjoymylifeasajuniorthreestudentandIwillkeepitinmyheartforever.5.Nowmylifeisbusybutfull.SoIbelieveIwilldomybesttomakemydreamcometrue.6.WhatanenjoyablelifeasajuniorthreestudentIhave!7.Ithinkitisawonderfullife.8.Let’scherishthetimetogether.15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌9.ThisiswhyIlikemylifeasajuniorthreestudent.10.IenjoymylifebecauseI’velearnedalotfromthisexperienceandI’llcherishtherestoftheJuniorThree.11.Let’ssavethelasttimetogoasfaraswecan.PossibleVersion1：Astimegoesby,IamaJuniorthreestudentnowandmylifehaschangedalot.Allday,I’mbusystudyingandIhavelessandlesstimetorelaxmyselfbecauseIneedtostudyharder.Asaresult,Ihavemorestress.Butontheotherhand,Icanmakemydreamcometruebystudying.Inaddition,Icanmakemyselfmoreconfidentaswell,sothatIcandealwithalltheproblemsIwillmeet.Inaword,IreallyenjoymylifenowbecauseIbelieveIwilldomybestformydream.PossibleVersion2：Astimegoesby,IhavebeenaJuniorThreestudent.Ithinkthelifeoftheschoolisfulloffunanditiscolourful,too.AlthoughIamverybusyandhavenotimetodoanythingIaminterestedin,IenjoyitverymuchbecauseIlearnhowtosolveproblemsandgetsomeexperience.WhenIwasintrouble,Inevergaveupandtriedmybesttoworkthemout.Asweknow,sayinggoes,‘Nopains,Nogains.’I’msureIwillhaveamorebrightschoollifethroughmyeffortsinthefuture.PossibleVersion3：Nowadays,IamaJuniorThreestudentandImakealotoffriendsthisyear.Maryisthebestfriendamongallmyfriends.Inmyopinion,shehasmanygoodpersonalitieswhichIshouldlearnfrom.Forexample,she’sgentle,honestandhardworking.Inaddition,shealwayshelpsmewithmylessons.Infreetime,weplaygamesanddohomeworktogether.IthinkthelifeinJuniorThreeissohappythatIhavethefriend-Mary.Asweallknow,friendshipismoreimportantthanwealth.ThisiswhyIlikemylifeasaJuniorThreestudent.PossibleVersion4：Asisknowntoall,JuniorThreeisanessentialprocessthatalmosteveryonehastoexperience.SomestudentsthinkthelifeasJuniorThreestudentsisboring,othersthinkitispainful.However,from15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌mypointofview,althoughthelifeisbusy,itisalsoafulllife.Ishoulddomassivemountainsofhomework,butIlearnalot.Forexample,Ilearnhowtokeepupwiththeothers.Thatmeansweshouldnevergiveup.IneverwastetimeandIdomyhomeworkandlearnknowledgeallthetime.Asthesayinggoes,allworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.Therefore,Iusuallyplaywithmyclassmatesafterclass.Thatmakesmerelaxed.AndthenIhaveenoughenergytolearnmoreknowledge.CertainlyIshouldsayIreallyenjoymylifeasaJuniorThreestudent.ThereasonofthisisthatIcanlearnalotandIhavesomanyrealfriendsaroundme.Inbrief,mylifeasaJuniorThreestudentissocolorfulthatIreallyenjoyit!15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌作文常见实用插入语插入语1、表示时间的affirst起初next接下来then然后afterthat那以后later后来soon/shortlyafter…之后不久finally最后intheend最后eventually最终atlast终于lately近来recently最近sincethen自从那时起afterthat那以后innotime不一会儿afterawhile一会儿afterward后来tobegin/startwith=inthefirstplace首先、第一点immediately立即、马上untilnow直到现在meanwhile=inthemeantime=atthesametime在此期间、同时suddenly=allofasudden突然attheageof…在……岁的时候assoonas一……就……theotherday几天前2、表示列举和时序first,second,third…finally，firstly,secondly,hirdly…,finally,firstofall,next,then,lastly,atfirst,foronething…foranother…,atthesametime，atlast3、表示列举forexample例如：…forinstance例如：…suchas短语如…suchasplayingfootball4、表示比较或对比like像unlike不像similarly同样地inthesameway以相同的方式comparedto与…相比while而Ilikecoffeewhilehelikestea.still=nevertheless然而onthecontrary正相反bedifferentfrom与……不同on(the)onehand…ontheotherhand一方面……另一方面5、表示增补notonly…butalso…不但……而且NotonlyJanebutalsoJacklikeswatchingmovie.aswellas不但……而且Jane,aswellasJacklikeswatchingmovie.Also=besides=furthermore=moreover此外、而且inaddition并且Youneedmoneyandtime,inaddition,youneeddiligence.你需要金钱和时间,此外你还需要努力。apartfrom除了……之外Apartfrommymothertongue,Ispeakseveralforeignlanguagesaswell.15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌除了母语外，我还会讲好几种外语。Hehasnootherinterests,apartfromhiswork.除了工作外，他别无其他兴趣。what'smore而且、更重要的Youshouldrememberit,andwhat'smore,youshouldgetitright.你应该记住它，更重要的是，应该正确理解它。what'sworse=tomakematterworse更糟糕的是Worsestill,themoneyinmywalletwasstolenthismorning.6、表示因果because因为since既然as由于nowthat既然+句子therefore因此thus这样so所以asaresult(of)结果becauseof=onaccountof因为thanksto多亏、由于forthisreason由于这个原因7、表示目的forthispurpose+that为了这个目的soastodoinordertodoInordertogetagoodmark,Iworkhard.sothat…IworkhardsothatIcangetagoodmark.8、表示让步though/although虽然、尽管evenif/eventhough尽管inspiteof尽管whatever/however/whoever无论/不管…….9、表示递进或强调besides况且what'smore更重要地是aboveall首先particularly特别地inotherwords换句话说inthatcase那样的话10、表示转折however然而totellthetruth说实话tobehonest诚实地说infact/asamatteroffact事实上11、表示总结15\n初三作文讲义系列新王牌thatis(tosay)也就是说ina/oneword简言之、一句话、总之generallyspeaking一般说来inshort=inafewwords简言之inconclusion=lastly最后地therefore因此ashasbeenmentioned正如所提到的itisquiteclearthat很显然thereisnodoubtthat毫无疑问itiswell-knownthat大家都知道asweallknow=asisknownas/sofarasIknow据我所知tosumup=tosummarize=insummary总之15